Monday, April 30, 2012

Writing Wrap- Up


           Writing has never been something that has come easily to me, nor has it ever been something that I enjoy. That did not change this year. In fact, my writing has gotten progressively worse throughout the year, as evidenced by my grades. Over the course of English class, we wrote a wide variety of essays. Some of the genres I had been familiar with, and others were completely foreign to me. I acquired several skills needed for each type of essay, but I have trouble utilizing in the actual paper.  Most capabilities in each graded category fluctuated greatly with each paper, except for support, in which case I always did poorly.

            Ideas, organization, and conventions are the categories that I struggle with the most. I have a difficult time trying to find out what I want to say and then supporting those statements. This was the primary issue in my literacy narrative, literary analysis, and research paper. As for conventions, this is the category in which I worry about last. Usually, I have procrastinated writing the essay and then I am in a rush to turn it in so I often forget about or do not have time to check for simple mistakes. Improving my ideas and organization is a matter that will take time and effort. I can achieve this by spending more time pre-writing. Conventions should prove easy to refine by leaving myself enough time to review my paper for mistakes before turning it in.

            Voice, word choice, and sentence fluency are the subjects in which I tend to do better in. I have an aptitude for diction and syntax. The skill was especially exemplified in my literacy narrative and literary analysis. Although I did better in these categories, they can still certainly be improved by reading my papers aloud to myself and seeing how it sounds. Reading your own writing aloud is a valuable skill that we learned about at the beginning of the year. I may not know what I want to say or what order it should be said in, but I can arrange an adequate choice of words in a sufficient order that will hopefully be satisfactory.

The first two essays I wrote, the literacy narrative and profile, were the ones I did best on. The literacy narrative was about my experience writing an essay for the Trustees’ Scholarship, and the profile was a descriptive essay that used a unique perspective to describe my bedroom. I believe I did better on these papers because the topics were something that I knew well and could connect with; something personal. In these papers, I did well on voice, word choice,  and sentence fluency. However, in the literacy narrative my weakest part was ideas, specifically support, and in the profile my organization was poor. Again, I think this could be solved, or at least tremendously improved by better quality pre-writing.

On the literary analysis and research paper, I received similar grades. It was not one category that I did particularly poor in, but rather my entire paper was inadequate. My lack of understanding and capability to complete this assignment acceptably was the basis for this. I would also blame my lack of interest in the topics I was writing about for the results. I was required to redo both of these papers multiple times.
The WrAP test this year does not exemplify a piece of my best writing. The WrAP is a writing test that assesses your ability to interpret and respond to a prompt. I found this year’s topic difficult to write about because it was not an issue that I was very familiar with. This made it tough to provide enough support to back the stance I had taken. I scored the same on overall development, organization, sentence structure, word choice, and mechanics. Support was the category that I scored the lowest in.

The quality of my essays depend on the level on interest on have in the topic I am writing about and this can be detrimental to a paper that is vital to my grade. This is something I can strive to be better at; producing an acceptable paper no matter the topic. Next year, my goals are to spend more time pre-writing my essays so that I can improve my ideas and organization, along with allowing more time for reviewing. This year has been a great learning experience and I will be able to build on the skills that I have developed. 

Common Errors List:
Unnecessary commas
Ex: The only good writing experience I remember having happened in the spring of eighth grade. 
                                                                                             ^ no comma
Passive
Ex: Starting at the desk, there is a corkboard that is covered in organized notes and small objects that were made by friends or given as gifts.
            Starting at the desk, the corkboard hides beneath the organized notes and small objects that hang from it.
Fragments
Ex: And options that again, public figures do not want to take a stance on.
            Public figures, again, do not wan to take a stance on these options.  
Comma Splice
Ex: Approximately 40% of all pregnancies were unintended last year, if that were fixed it would make a dramatic difference in the population.                                                      ^ no comma
Citation:
The old-man strongly suggested that “no man must travel alone in the Klondike after fifty below” (par.21).

Tuesday, April 17, 2012

Poetry in class

A few weeks ago, we started the poetry portion of our English class. I had been dreading this all year, and unforunately the time had arrived. I have never liked poetry. I did not like writing haikus in third grade, I found the 6th grade anthology of poems project to be a very unpleasant experience, and I absolutely hated the 8th poetry course involving the close reading or Romeo and Juliet. I don't know what it is about poetry- maybe the way the poems never seem to make logical sense or the way that the structure can change the entire meaning of the poem or the way the craziest of adjectives can describe the most minute of details- but it always seems torture to try and get through this part of the class.

So far in class, we haven't had to write nearly as many poems as I thought we would but
I still fear what is to come. We have mostly just been annotating poems, looking for the different techniques that are used in each one. I still do not enjoy poetry, but the course has not been as bad as I thought (but we still haven't finished.)

The Hundreth Man and poems assigned in class
150 minutes

Song Analysis

I chose to analyze the song, "Sail" by AWOLNATION because it is one of my favorite songs. I found many different literary devices that are being used in this song. One of the poetry techniques that stood out to me immediately is their (the band) use of imagery:  'an angel cries' 'sick pride' 'cry for help' 'kill myself' 'different breed' 'sail with me into the dark.' These dire images give the song a dark tone but I think the constant repetition of 'sail' breaks up the darkness with an idea of hope. Sail could mean breaking away from bad things, or leaving his 'angel,' or even leaving permanently by 'killing [himself.'] This is how I show my love could refer to the different ways he expresses himself because of his A.D.D.. This is how an angel cries could mean that someone he loves has to learn how to handle his A.D.D. too. I blame it on my own sick pride might mean that he feels guilty for like having a learning disability (his A.D.D.). Repetition is another main technique being used here. 'I blame it on my A.D.D. baby' is repeated at the end of every stanza. After two sad and somewhat depressing lines, the writer tells us to 'blame it on [his] A.D.D..' This line makes it seem like the writer is okay with how he is and like he is excusing the two lines prior to the one about his A.D.D.. Repetition and diction. The repetition of the word 'maybe' makes the writer seem like he sets himself apart from others; possibly due to his A.D.D.? There is no real rhyme scheme in poem.


Sail


This is how I show my love
I made it in my mind because
I blame it on my A.D.D. baby

This is how an angel cries
I blame it on my own sick pride
Blame it on my A.D.D. baby

Sail
Sail
Sail
Sail
Sail

Maybe I should cry for help
Maybe I should kill myself
Blame it on my A.D.D. baby

Maybe I'm a different breed
Maybe I'm not listening
So blame it on my A.D.D. baby

Sail
Sail
Sail
Sail
Sail

La la la la la la oh

La la la la la la oh

Sail
Sail
Sail
Sail
Sail

Sail with me into the dark
Sail
Sail with me into the dark
Sail
Sail with me into the dark
Sail
Sail with me, sail with me
Sail

http://www.lyricsfreak.com/a/awolnation/sail_20976449.html



Sunday, March 25, 2012

Nervous Conditions Project

For the Nervous Conditions project, Avery, Sarah, and I decided to work together as a group. The assignment was to look at the book from a different perspective, find new insight to either one of the character or another key part of the book and present it in an original and creative way. We really had a difficult time deciding how approach the book from a new perspective. Our first idea was to write an example of the letters that Tambu and Nyasha sent each other while Tambu was at Sacred Heart. Then we decided that we really wanted to perform something.

After realizing that, Sarah, Avery, and I thought about the complex characters in the novel and ways we could dissect a part of their identity and learn something new from that. We found sections in the book where the characters would say one thing but mean something completely different. So we analyzed these situations, and turned it into a sort of character versus conscience thing. When we perform, I will give the context of the quote that we have chosen, Avery will say the quote, and then Sarah will act as the character's conscience, saying what they truly mean.

Robotics Club

This year, I somehow ended end up robotics club with my sister and her friends. The goal of the club is to build a robot and compete with it at the regional competition. The organization that runs the competition is called FIRST (For Inspiration and Recognition of Science and Technology) and it's purpose is to develop ways to inspire students in engineering and technology fields. All of the teams are given a standard set of parts and the details of the game at the beginning of January, at an event called Kickoff.  Then we are given six weeks to construct a competitive robot, that can operate when guided by wireless controls, to accomplish the game's tasks. 


The Bayou Regional Robotics Competition was last week. It was held in Kenner and lasted for three days. The first day is used for working on the robotic, making sure it passes inspection and operates correctly. All day Friday and on Saturday morning, teams participate in qualifying matches. On Saturday afternoon, after the qualification matches have ended, the top eight ranked teams will pick partners from any team ranked below them, and the resulting alliances will compete to be regional winner. Since it was our rookie year, we ran into several major problems, but with the help of our alliances through out the qualifying matches, we were able to finish 35th out of 49 teams.  

Monday, February 6, 2012

Global Issue Research Paper: Part II

Remember when I said that I thought writing my draft would be easy because of my outline? I was wrong. When I sat down to write my draft on Sunday, I had the hardest time articulating my ideas. I know people say that getting started is the hardest part but after that it gets better. Well everything was the hardest part for me. Even with my outline as a guideline, the order that I put my points in didn't seem to make sense. All of my information could go in different parts of my paper depending on which approach I took.

I decided that I should just follow my outline for now so that I could get all of my ideas onto the paper. And that since it was just a draft, I could always go back and change it up. I do have a few questions about citing that I would like to address in class, but overall with my first draft written, I feel pretty confident about this paper.

Nervous Conditions: Chapters 1 and 2

Last Thursday, we started reading a new book in class. It is called, Nervous Conditions by Tsitsi Dangarembga. It is a semi-autobiographical novel about a girl named Tambu, who grows up in Rhodesia during the 1960s and 1970s. The story focuses on themes of gender, race, class, and cultural change and how it affected Tambu. 


The first two chapters are mainly about the education that Tambu and Nhamo, her brother, received. Though it also talks about their way of life and Tambu's relationships with her family members. Honestly, I was not really intrigued by the beginning of the book but hopefully that will change. However, the first sentence of the book: "I was not sorry when my brother died," did raise my curiosity. If for no other reason, I want to keep reading the book so I can learn the story behind Nhamo's death.